Dark Poem

Just a little something I made up for an English class at school. I'm in year 8 and poetry is easy. I don't do it much but when I do I'm proud of the outcome. Some of you might think its a little dark but I write this to change what some of you may think about the world and its inhabitants. The world is sometimes a cruel place, but always remember that there is good in the world too and that's awesome. By the way, I'm not just some EMO kid being Emo. I'm a normal person like you and I love to write stories.

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The Wicked Path Of Destiny/ The Death Of Gods Pets- Mankind

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Published: September 2008

I walk the face of earth once more,
a mindless puppet, my strings are torn.
the creaky bones, the bad eyesight,
yet the chance to turn wrong to right.
wars-a-waging, old mans guilt,
the worlds now on more then just a tilt.
parents weeping, children slain,
bloody thoughts, fear will reign.
I look in the shadows, a creature did lurk,
he whispered to me, hiding a smirk.
"Thou shalt be killed if thee can't find,
the demon lurking in thou mind."
So off I ventured, to quench my thirst,
of corpses piled with hearts-a-burst.
And on that quest what did I see?

The Wicked Path Of Destiny

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  • by Bear Peterson
  • 1 year ago

You should be proud of the outcome with results like this. I've been writing poems for over half a century yet can't claim to have ever written any better. I'd love to read more of your poetry.

  • by Harold Rhys
  • 1 year ago

This helped me with a school project. It was a good poem to work on!

  • by Caiden Ireland, Australia/Brisbane
  • 2 years ago

This poem shows the difficulty of life and challenges to come, it's a great poem showing one who has guilt about the things he's done, being convinced to right his wrongs, and make peace with his fate. It's a beautiful poem for those in the dark and for those who needs from encouragement.

  • by Nataya
  • 3 years ago

Dude. This is awesome. Forget your English class, you should be the next Edgar Allan Poe!! Awesome stuff! The first one I read on this site and HOLY SMOKES! You got some talent! And EMO?! What-the-hay?! Go back to sixth grade whoever mentioned EMO! I mean, it isn't nothing to joke about, but this is a site about poetry, aint no room for bullies here. Keep going man, this stuff's awesome!! 5/5!!

  • by Karaaaa
  • 2 years ago

This made my heart skip a beat! I love where your mind goes. This is such a great poem! Where can I find more???

  • by Devin Edgin, Hot Springs
  • 4 years ago

Ok, don't hate me I'm just being honest. You act like you have a problem with emos. You ended it with "I'm not just some EMO kid". Why would you say that? It is wrong and you act like they aren't people. They are people and they are just as good as you if not better. No, I'm not emo. There's a difference between goth and emo and I don't know what it is. I've researched for their sake and it is all by professionals so they can't explain it. My point is you shouldn't throw emos/goths under the bus they do nothing wrong. Unless they worship the Devil. Nice poem I'm also a poet. I'm a dark poet and I've been there and still am there. My demons will forever haunt me. That's not a pun from your poem either I've always said that.

  • by Ruby Asics, Fairfield
  • 4 years ago

Great! Love the way you structured your poem and it's got sophisticated language for a year 8.

  • by Natasha Valencia
  • 4 years ago

This is amazing. This is what I live for. This is truly amazing.
Also, so you know, there is nothing wrong with being an 'Emo' or 'Goth'. I am both, yet I am as human as anyone else.

  • by Shirley Harper
  • 4 years ago

I really love how you were able to express your thoughts and at the same time rhyme. I understand that you were only writing of the dark in the world, there being a lot of it, even though you know that there is good in the world too. I don't exactly understand the meaning of your poem. I mean who is this I person. and what are the creatures and demons. and if your last line is saying that he/she wasn't able to turn wrong to right

  • by Rebekkah Harper
  • 4 years ago

Um, read the poem and it was beautiful. I've been writing poems since I was 7 years old and now I'm 15... I guess writing poems is my hobby just like writing my thoughts, my feelings, and my dreams on paper so I don't forget them. Poems to me are like unspoken words that are supposed to be spoken but in a romantic way... cheesy huh? Well any way LOVED the poem. \(^-^)/

  • by Nathan Martin, Yuma Arizona
  • 5 years ago

I love your work, can I put this on guitar for you? Full credit will be yours. :) I'll post the link for YouTube on here so you can see the masterpiece unless you just want to keep it as a poem

  • by Kathleen
  • 5 years ago

I love this poem! It is so beautiful and touching. You have a true gift, and this is coming from someone who usually doesn't care for poetry. Keep writing. You are amazing!

  • by Elizabeth McCrorie
  • 9 years ago

Beautiful! I love the way you wrote this. So True and sincere. And no Emo Never came to mind.
I'm truly speechless! Amazing!

  • by Anita Kurup
  • 10 years ago

Poignantly lovely. Several of my thoughts found their echo in your words. I do not think this poem marks you as EMO, rather as a sensitive young person. Most times, we forget that sensitiveness breeds perspective sensibilities. Keep voicing your thoughts.

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