Depression Poem by Teens

I'm unhappy, but nobody can tell. I hide it.

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This is my poem of the day because I feel the same way. My boyfriend and I were going through drama, and he think it's okay for him not to say how I feel about it, but it hurts me deep inside...

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Analysis of Form and Technique

I'm Dying On The Inside

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Published by Family Friend Poems March 2009 with permission of the Author.

You see a smile on the outside,
But that's all you can see.
What if tears run down my face on the inside?

You hear a laugh on the outside,
But that's all you can hear.
What if I'm crying out for help on the inside?

You smell the scent I wear every day on the outside,
But that's all you can smell.
What if it smells of death on the inside?

You feel soft, smooth skin on the outside,
But that's all you feel.
What if I'm being torn apart on the inside?

You taste sweet lips kissing you on the outside,
But that's all you can taste.
What if my lips taste of blood on the inside?

You can tell I'm happy on the outside,
But what if you can't tell I'm dying on the inside?

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Analysis of Form and Technique

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Techniques this poem uses:

  • Most of this poem is made up of three-line stanzas called tercets.
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  • Each tercet focuses on one of the five senses (sight, hearing, smelling, touching, and tasting).
  • This poem has a strong sense of structure. Each stanza starts with what other people observe and then shares the reality for that person.

    You (see, hear, smell, etc.)…
    But that’s all you can (see, hear, smell, etc.)
    What if…

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  • @china by @china
  • 13 years ago

This is my poem of the day because I feel the same way. My boyfriend and I were going through drama, and he think it's okay for him not to say how I feel about it, but it hurts me deep inside to think that he doesn't care. I just leave it alone for a while. I still have tears that I hide from him.

  • Ashley by Ashley, Texas
  • 13 years ago

It's how me and my boyfriend are. He gets mad because I don't show my emotions towards him he just doesn't know that if I did it would be pain and sadness. No one can see so, no one can help. My wrist are the only evidence of my secret depression. I want help...I need help. but I can't find it..

  • Sami Berry by Sami Berry
  • 14 years ago

I swear this is me. I try to tell people I hurt but they don't see it. They just see what they want to see, a perfect girl with no problems but they could not be more wrong about me.

  • Adam by Adam, North Carolina
  • 14 years ago

This is like me and my girlfriend, I used to show her how I felt but she got angry at me for being sad all the time.....

  • Hailey by Hailey, Illinois
  • 14 years ago

This is just like what I go thru everyday. Nobody understands how much I hurt

  • dev by dev
  • 15 years ago

right now this is how me and my girlfriend are, I suffer but she don't know it

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